tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1413879796435723871.post3531434920434665882..comments2023-10-24T02:02:57.173-07:00Comments on A Caledonian Journey: Timestream, Part 10Rhianon Jamesonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13627163137265856251noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1413879796435723871.post-42515695065527546342009-12-11T16:02:04.062-08:002009-12-11T16:02:04.062-08:00You didn't miss anything because it wasn't...You didn't miss anything because it wasn't there. That's one of the hazards of posting the early parts before finishing the entire thing. :( I was saying that, had I the chance to go back and play with the text, I'd have foreshadowed the tinkering, so it wouldn't have been such a pull-the-ending-out-of-the-arse moment.<br /><br />My alternative escape (because, really, how was this crappy 19th century technology going to outrun or outgun 20th century technology?) would have involved stealing the device so Billings couldn't have followed them...but that would have required a longer story, with the gang heading back to the airpark or wherever to steal the device, and it would still have required going back in the story and having Billings explain that the device was how he got to Caledon originally. Sigh.Rhianon Jamesonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13627163137265856251noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1413879796435723871.post-2478688480369991742009-12-11T02:14:58.899-08:002009-12-11T02:14:58.899-08:00Ahhh, I missed that he'd tinkered before the s...Ahhh, I missed that he'd tinkered before the start of the tale - I assumed he'd done it whilst in dock waiting for the sisters (I think because it was a laser & computer I assumed he couldn't have added them before the trip).<br /><br />I like the fact you now have an enemy, and a powerful, determined and well-resourced one at that!HeadBurro Antfarmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10855762117761362578noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1413879796435723871.post-8837259841850093922009-12-09T17:05:47.280-08:002009-12-09T17:05:47.280-08:00Well, a laser shooting at your balloon is a proble...Well, a laser <i>shooting</i> at your balloon is a problem; a laser simply <i>on</i> your balloon is not!<br /><br />I'll admit it was something of a deus ex machina at that point, although, in my defense, we did have Uncle Roland along for the ride. But if I were redoing the beginning, I'd have picked up Roland as he was tinkering with the airship.<br /><br />But I'm glad you liked the tale - and it's true, one suspects that Mr. Billings, and/or the timestream device, may make a further appearance.Rhianon Jamesonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13627163137265856251noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1413879796435723871.post-45281785207972632572009-12-09T03:14:00.688-08:002009-12-09T03:14:00.688-08:00wOOt! A wonderful end to a cracking tale - a laser...wOOt! A wonderful end to a cracking tale - a laser on a balloon seems somewhat rash though!<br /><br />I very much doubt the calculating Billings is going to let you escape to spread the word though - watch your backs!HeadBurro Antfarmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10855762117761362578noreply@blogger.com